[自分の回答]


Q1. Thank you for participating. Today, I'd like to ask you some questions about exploring future careers and workplace choices. First, can you describe a job or type of career you are interested in and explain what attracts you to it?
A1. I'd like to know and study about art, art gallery, businesses. So currently I work in another job, but in the future, I want to follow my father's full work as a painter. So he is an artist, but sometimes he struggles to manage his money. That's why I want to help.


Q2. Good points. When thinking about your future job, would you rather work in an office setting or have a job that allows you to work remotely from different locations? Why?
A2. I'd like to I prefer to kinda to have a job who who can work remotely. So of course I like I like a stable, a farm office and I don't want to move so often. But in ka in my in in my in my hometown there they're they're very, very isolated uh places. So a remote work can uh I can access to uh can access to uh the business business opportunity uh even in the uh local area.


Q3. I see. Some workplaces offer flexible schedules, allowing employees to choose when they work, but this can sometimes make teamwork more difficult. Do you think flexible schedules are a good idea in most workplaces? Why or why not?
A3. I don't want to boost flexible times for cooperating one project or business tasks. In my current offices, we had to discuss so many times and so and it takes long time. So I hope they can employees should gather should gather each other at least


Q4. Thank you. Jobs continue to change with new technology and communication tools. Do you think traditional office jobs will become less common or remain the standard over the next decade? Why or why not?
A4. I believe traditional office work will be will be less more will be less compared to 20 centuries. Of course, office crack is important, but AI technology and the way they they were how to solve the business uh task uh improves. So uh uh for example, at at my office uh I I I adopt a new uh new new software to uh uh arrange uh time management.




[添削回答]


Q1. Thank you for participating. Today, I'd like to ask you some questions about exploring future careers and workplace choices. First, can you describe a job or type of career you are interested in and explain what attracts you to it?
A1. I'm interested in art and art gallery businesses. Right now, I work in a different field, but in the future, I want to follow my father's path as a painter. He's a talented artist, but he sometimes finds it hard to manage his finances. That’s why I want to help him, and also learn how to combine art with business skills, so I can support him and maybe run an art gallery one day.


Q2. Good points. When thinking about your future job, would you rather work in an office setting or have a job that allows you to work remotely from different locations? Why?
A2. I’d prefer to have a job that allows me to work remotely. I do like the stability of an office, but my hometown is pretty isolated, so having a remote job would let me access more business opportunities even if I stay in my local area. Remote work also gives me more flexibility, so I don't have to move so often.


Q3. I see. Some workplaces offer flexible schedules, allowing employees to choose when they work, but this can sometimes make teamwork more difficult. Do you think flexible schedules are a good idea in most workplaces? Why or why not?
A3. I don’t really support flexible schedules, especially when people need to work together on projects. In my current office, we often spend a lot of extra time just trying to coordinate meetings because everyone’s working at different times. I think it’s better if employees can gather in person at least sometimes to discuss and work together more efficiently.


Q4. Thank you. Jobs continue to change with new technology and communication tools. Do you think traditional office jobs will become less common or remain the standard over the next decade? Why or why not?
A4. I think traditional office jobs will become less common over the next decade. With new AI technology and better communication tools, a lot of business tasks can be solved more efficiently, even outside the office. For example, at my workplace, I started using new software for time management, which makes it easier to work remotely. So, I believe more people will work from home or in different locations instead of going to a traditional office every day.




A1. "I'd like to know and study about art, art gallery, businesses."
⏩️ I'm interested in art and art gallery businesses.
「I'd like to know and study about」は「I'm interested in」という表現にすることで、より自然で簡潔に興味を表すことができます。また、「art, art gallery, businesses」の羅列を「art and art gallery businesses」とすることで、より具体的なビジネス分野としての意味合いが明確になり、自然な繋がりになりますね。


A2. ✅ Remote work also gives me more flexibility, so I don't have to move so often.
元の回答では「頻繁に引っ越したくない」という希望が述べられていましたが、リモートワークがその希望をどのように解決するのかという具体的な理由が明確ではありませんでした。この改善された文では、「柔軟性」というリモートワークの重要な利点を明確に提示し、それが引っ越しを減らすことにつながるという論理的なつながりを補足しています。これにより、リモートワークを希望する理由がより説得力を持って伝わりますね。


A3. ✅ because everyone’s working at different times.
元の回答では欠けていた、なぜ会議の調整が難しいのかという理由（「皆が異なる時間に働いているから」）を補足しました。この具体的な理由を追加することで、主張の説得力が増しますね。


A4. "I believe traditional office work will be will be less more will be less compared to 20 centuries."
⏩️ I think traditional office jobs will become less common over the next decade.
「20世紀と比較して」という漠然とした期間指定を「今後10年間で」と具体的に修正することで、より現実的で関連性の高い期間を示しています。また、「less more will be less」という曖昧な表現を「less common」と明確にすることで、主張の意図が格段に伝わりやすくなっています。




[自分の回答]


I have to tell a problem about your services.
I had already received set of ceramic plates but they were broken. I am planning to have a dnner with my fsmily next week. your plates might be good design but you should be careful not to break them . I strongly recommmend that you sent the replacement soon via air




[添削回答]


To: Customer Support
Subject: Broken Plates in Recent Order

I am writing to report a problem with my recent order. I received the set of ceramic plates yesterday, but several plates were broken and the packaging was damaged. I am planning to have a family dinner next week, so I need the plates to serve my guests. This situation is a big problem because I do not have enough plates for everyone. I kindly ask that you send me a replacement set as soon as possible, preferably by air, so I receive them before my event.




A1. "I have to tell a problem about your services."
⏩️ I am writing to report a problem with my recent order.
「I have to tell a problem about your services.」という直接的な表現から、「I am writing to report a problem with my recent order.」というより丁寧で公式な書き出しに修正されました。これにより、ビジネスレターとして適切なトーンになり、メールの目的が明確に伝わります。


A1. "I am planning to have a dnner with my fsmily next week."
⏩️ I am planning to have a family dinner next week, so I need the plates to serve my guests. This situation is a big problem because I do not have enough plates for everyone.
元の文章では、来週の夕食会があることしか述べられていませんでした。改善された文章では、なぜそのプレートが夕食会に必要なのか（「ゲストに料理を提供するため」）、そしてプレートが不足していることによって具体的にどのような問題が生じているのか（「全員分のプレートが足りない」）を明確に説明しています。これにより、問題の深刻さと緊急性がより伝わりやすくなります。


A1. "I strongly recommmend that you sent the replacement soon via air"
⏩️ I kindly ask that you send me a replacement set as soon as possible, preferably by air, so I receive them before my event.
元の文章では、交換品を早急に航空便で送るよう求めているだけでした。改善された文章では、「イベントまでに受け取りたい」という具体的な理由を付け加えています。これにより、なぜ早急な対応が必要なのか、その背景にある「目的」が明確になり、依頼の説得力が増しています。